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percentage of female and male who passed their driving test in one Asian Country over 30 years from 1980 until 2010.

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 of females and males who passed their driving test in one Asian Country over 30 years from 1980 until 2010. In general trend, it can be seen that the
percentage
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 who passed the driving test was dominated by
women
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 for 4 years.
While
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 the
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 of
men
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 is always below
men
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. One of the interesting things is that both, always show an increase in the
percentage
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 of
women
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 and
men
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 who pass the driving test. Looking at the details, the
women
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percentage
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 started at nearly 48 per cent in 1980. After that, in the next year increased gradually to about 50% in 1990 and hit a peak at almost 70 per cent in 2000.
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 in 2010 the female
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 dipped to around 60%-70%.
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 with the number of
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percentage
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 for 4 years. It increased dramatically in 1980 and 1990 with percentages around 30% and 40%. The next year in 2000 it rose to under 50%. The following year did not decrease and increase, it stable at 50%.

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