the graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purpose between 1989 and 2009

the graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purpose between 1989 and 2009
The line graph shows how many international
traveller
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travellers
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visted
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visited
to the
UK
for different
reasons
between 1989 and 2009.
Overall
, the number of overseas travellers who went to the
UK
for several purposes increased in 20 years. For certain
reasons
,
specifically
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Holiday ended up as the most popular,
whereas
Meeting Friends and Relatives was the least widely visited. At the start of the period, among the purposes of international travellers to the
UK
, the Holiday was ranked
first,
at roughly 6.5
million
, followed by the number of Business and Meeting Friends and Relatives
visitors
were 5
million
and around 3.5
million
respectively. With regards to the Holiday reason rate, there fluctuated between 6.5 and 9
million
visitors
during the twenty-year period.
This
hit a low of roughly 2.5
million
in 2004 before increasing substantially over the next five years. As far as the other
reasons
rates,
this
country witnessed a rose in
million
visitors
and fell slightly in 2009. Over 20 years period, the rate for several
reasons
of overseas
visitors
to the
UK
was unchanged.
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