Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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increasingly popular . In my point of view ,

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completely agree that

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music

could be a powerful means of uniting

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from diverse cultures and age groups . In

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view and support the subject with examples . Emotional resonance

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possesses a unique capacity to stir a deep feeling within us . As

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people

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spark cultural exchange and evoke an aspiration around the world .

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, spreading cultural traditions is a good approach

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bringing

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them to our civilization and language .

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oxford university clarify that learning a

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language is better by exposure to their songs and lyrics . Another benefits

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notion may refer to bonding intergeneration by

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expression .

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to be connected with the young ones and strengthen familial and social bondings .

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of tourists and

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attractive

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place to visit . In conclusion , it is undoubtedly that

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music

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tremendous merits .

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believe these concerts

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best way for

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community because

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promote social intergenerational bonding ,build a sense of

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and increase