Today, many women work outside home. Do you think this could be beneficial or harmful to their children?

As
women
work outside
she
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they
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will get knowledge about today's world which is beneficial for
children
as well as
family members. There are so many good
side
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sides
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about
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to
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a working woman. There are few harmful effects and more advantages.
Firstly
, if
women
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woman
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will do a job
then
by
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apply
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that
she
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they
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will get a lot of information,
by
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apply
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which
she
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they
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can provide to their
kids
which will be helpful for both. As working
lady
will be educated so
by
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in
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this
ways
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way
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she can teach
there
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their
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kids
easily and properly. If the
mother
of
child
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the child
a child
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is a working woman
then
that child will get more information about
world
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the world
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. As mothers of
kids
are facing
really
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reality
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of life she can teach
children
very well and
kids
will get more data. If
lady
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a lady
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whould
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would
should
be independent
then
she gets more power in the house and society.
For example
, if a
lady
of a home will even give a contribution to the house
then
children
can get more facilities.
Secondly
, there is some side effect like female doing work outside can not give much
time
to their child and can spend only less
time
for
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their family. As a
lady
doing a job outside she has to go from morning to evening so, when she returns back she will become tired and can not give much
time
to her family.
For example
, if a
mother
is working from 9:00AM to 6:00PM
then
she will gets less
time
to spend with there
kids
and
mother
staying home will get qulity give to house. In conclution, working womens
children
have more advantage
then
non working
women
childrens. If
mother
will be doing job
then
children
can get more benefits, and
kids
will learn to respect
women
empowerment.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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