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The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.

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The table illustrates the amount of average family earned and paid
on
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for
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food
 and
clothes
 in a particular city in
UK
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the UK
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,
while
 the pie chart
provide
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the
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information about the
proportion
 of
money
 expenses,in 2010 and 2013.
It is clear that
while
total
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the total
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 earned by an average family
had
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a
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slightly decreased between 2010 and 2013,the amount
of
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spent on
food
 and
clothes
 increased.
Additionally
,they spent more
money
in
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on
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food
 than
clothes
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on clothes
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.
Accroding
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According
 to the table,in 2010,
average
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the average
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of
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a
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family in
UK
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the UK
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has
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earned 29000 pounds,
while
 nearly half of the
money
 was spent on
food
 and
clothes
.In 2013,
,
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average
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the average
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 income of a family in
UK
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the UK
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has
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dropped to 25000 pounds,
while
money
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the money
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 that was used
in
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for
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food
 and
clothes
has
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slightly increased from 14000 to 15000. Regarding the pie chart,the
proportion
of
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used for meat and fish was the largest with 29% in 2010,
while
 it dropped to 23% in 2013.
Similarly
,a downward trend was seen in the figure for
clothes
,from 15% to 13%.
On the other hand
,the
proportion
 of fruit and vegetables and daily
product
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products
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 has an upward trend with 26% and 12% growth to 30% and 16% respectively.
Finally
,
category
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the category
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 of other
food
had
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 remain
same
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the same
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proportion
 for three years with 18%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average income
  • spending habits
  • proportion
  • cost of living
  • economic changes
  • cultural factors
  • standard of living
  • economic health
  • leftover income
  • savings
  • expenses
  • financial trends
  • value for money
  • economic forecasts
  • significant increase/decrease
  • spending patterns
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