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Some people believe that the best solution of overwaight is to invoaled more sport class while other don't To what extent do you agree?

#people #overwaight #sport #class
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increace
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increase
of
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 the proportion of overweight people
govornments
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governments
 are under
the
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apply
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presser
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pressure
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 to solve the following issues of
obeisy
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obesity
. Some
indivigials
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individuals
 believe that the only way to deal with
this
 problem is
be
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involveding
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involved
involving
more
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lessoms amd excercises
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lessons and exercises
 in
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the sducational
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sducational
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educational
education
 system in schools. I disagree with
taht
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that
 and I think there
is
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 better ways.
Firstly
, I admittedly think that
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 more physical activities is a good solution.
However
, in my
opinion
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 it is
unconvenate
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unconverted
 for kids because kids learn more effectively with enjoyable
matheds
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methods
matches
maths
 and one of
that
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kind
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 of ways that
i
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 want to give is creating
gemas
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games
 and cartons with healthy
carictars
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characters
 that go to
gym
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the gym
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 and eat healthy which is going to be funny so it will affect children
unawarly
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unaware
.
secondly
, supporting health content is an
extreamly
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extremely
 helpful plan since
that
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a
vidue
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virtue
venue
video
 can go around the
word
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world
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 in minutes and people spend time engaging with devices more with
humens
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humans
.
In other words
,
usind
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using
 the internet is the most convenient way in
this
 age. In conclusion, to deal with
high
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a high
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 number of people suffering
of
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from
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obstiy
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obesity
 there are many
useful
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users
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out
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apply
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a school
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school
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schools
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 that
focus
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 on all members
in
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community
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the community
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no
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not
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 only young.
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