Many students are taught to push themselves to try and be better than other students, rather than work together for everyone’s benefits. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Working together is better
things
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for every
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success
, but youngster
are
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pushing their own self for to be better
from
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their
classmate
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.
However
, there have some pros and cons,
I
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which I
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will describe from my view.
undoubtably
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, everyone
want
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to
success
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in their own way. In that way most of the time they push themselves to try and to be better
from
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other
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others
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.
likewise
, a student always
having
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pressure from their guardian, they always push them to be better
from
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other children.
For example
, a topper in the classroom all the time he
try
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to do some extra thing for his
success
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Furthermore
, when you go to
interview
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the interview
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board for your interview you need to do something better from
other person
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another person
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.
On the other hand
, when you go to do some extraordinary work for your teacher or workplace sometime it would be hard for you to do
yourself
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it yourself
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.
In addition
, when a
group
of people work
with
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a project,
the gat
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they get
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success
easily from
who
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those who
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started
this
alone.
For example
, recently a
group
of people invent a Al(artificial
intelligent
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) tool, which is chat GPT.
Interviewer
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asked a question to CEO of
this
company that “
is
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it possible a person can create like ChatGPT”
he
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replied, “
it’s
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almost impossible”
Likewise
, without a
group
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,group
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someone
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it
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would be impossible for you to complete.
In addition
,
organization
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organizations
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, never
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success
alone, they need manpower for their
success
.
To sum up
, if you want to be better
from
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other
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others
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than
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then
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pass yourself, and try to be good
from
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to
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surrounding people.
However
, when you try to do something better unit work with your
group
otherwise
some time
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sometimes
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it would be not possible for you.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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