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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local  inhabitants ant the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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As international
tourism
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 has brought enormous benefits to many places, on another side there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment but,
this
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have
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 more advantages
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then
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disadvantages
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.
People
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of
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 other countries are coming to see and
expore
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explore
 the different places.
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,
tourism
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 will increase
a
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people
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 will get more employment and the
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nation
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 economy will increase.
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, A person
of
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a
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other country
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another country
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 will come and will exchange
it
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idea
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as well as
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 culture which will be helpful for
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nation
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the nation
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 to develop and
a
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high growth will be noticed. Other
nation
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people
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 will come
then
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 it will be
helful
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helpful
 in maintaining good relation between 2
country
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countries
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, If 5 person will come from
the
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paris
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Paris
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 to
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india
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India
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then
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 they will eat,
travel
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, buy
cloths
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clothes
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, and more which will help in earning profit
them
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.
Citizen
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Citizens
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 of
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nation
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a nation
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 can learn new things and create
relation
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relations
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 with each
others
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other
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. On another side, there are some
disadvantages
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for
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tourism
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such
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 as local shopkeeper less get less profit
compare
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 to malls and more. As
forign
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foreign
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travel
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 more which will create air pollution,
noice
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noise
 pollution and more. If resource will use too much
then
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 it can create harm to
environment
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the environment
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,
People
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 whose income is dependent on touristry and things like corona can affect it
to
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 much. In place like a new
zealand
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 3 months more
travel
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 is seen so 9 months less
travel
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 is seen at that time they face unemployment
serious
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seriously
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. In conclusion,
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the traveler
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traveler
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traveller
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 is good for the
nation
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 and there are some
disadvantages
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also
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. From the above data, it can be said that
tourism
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 plays
great
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 role in
country's
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the country's
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 economy. It can
said
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 that the advantages of international
tourism
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 outweigh the
disadvantages
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.
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