International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local  inhabitants ant the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

As international
tourism
has brought enormous benefits to many places, on another side there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment but,
this
have
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more advantages
then
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disadvantages
.
People
of
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other countries are coming to see and
expore
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explore
the different places.
Firstly
,
tourism
will increase
a
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people
will get more employment and the
nation
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economy will increase.
Secondly
, A person
of
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a
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other country
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another country
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will come and will exchange
it
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their
his
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idea
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as well as
culture which will be helpful for
nation
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the nation
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to develop and
a
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high growth will be noticed. Other
nation
people
will come
then
it will be
helful
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helpful
in maintaining good relation between 2
country
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.
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, If 5 person will come from
the
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paris
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to
the
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india
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then
they will eat,
travel
, buy
cloths
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clothes
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, and more which will help in earning profit
them
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.
Citizen
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of
nation
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a nation
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can learn new things and create
relation
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relations
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with each
others
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. On another side, there are some
disadvantages
for
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tourism
such
as local shopkeeper less get less profit
compare
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compared
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to malls and more. As
forign
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foreign
will
travel
more which will create air pollution,
noice
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noise
pollution and more. If resource will use too much
then
it can create harm to
environment
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the environment
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.
For example
,
People
whose income is dependent on touristry and things like corona can affect it
to
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much. In place like a new
zealand
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3 months more
travel
is seen so 9 months less
travel
is seen at that time they face unemployment
serious
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. In conclusion,
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traveler
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is good for the
nation
and there are some
disadvantages
also
. From the above data, it can be said that
tourism
plays
great
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role in
country's
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the country's
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economy. It can
said
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that the advantages of international
tourism
outweigh the
disadvantages
.
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