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In your opinion, why is the circus still a popular form of entertainment in the modern electronic age?

#circus #form #entertainment #age
In our modern society,
besides
 technology instruments, circuses are still well-known as
a
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wonderful entertainment. In my opinion, there is a huge difference between entertaining
people
 live or
electronicaly
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electronically
 on the screen. At
first,
in
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entertaining
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industry
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 it is
crrutial
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crucial
 to pay attention to the
amount
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 of observers and
also
 the profit. In our modern world
gadjets
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gadgets
, apps and gizmos are playing the
roll
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 so that most
of
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the
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people
are
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really like to spend their leisure time scrolling pages and watching different kinds of videos.
For example
, educational videos, comedy or films.
Moreover
, these apps rather than being free for everyone in the world,
they
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make
all the
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people
 much lazy than before because they do not have to drive to the beautiful flower festival or the classic cars exhibits.
On the other hand
, we can see that all our imagination about entertaining tools was wrong because nowadays the circus is still
a
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 popular exhibit for
people
 as it was before.
This
 magical tent has a lot of
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 to show and it can not be frustrating in the
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 story of mankind.
In addition
, in the
circus
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 we can see clowns, juggling, horseback riding and so on.
Moreover
, live shoes always have their special audience because they are still the peoples who really like
tohave
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to have
 breathe taking experience
with
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 watching an amazing lion in the open cave under
the
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 big tent. These shows
also
 have detrimental effects
in
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 animals' environment.
For example
, all the circuses have a trainer to teach each animal how to talk, dance, fly or run in front of the thousands of
people
 who are gazing
to
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 their eyes. They take them apart from their families in order to
fullfil
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fulfil
 their
puckets
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pockets
packets
 which is not
ethically
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 at all.
Moreover
, these shows need a big
budjet
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budget
 because not only they should pay all workers payment but
also
 they should feed all the animals well and
also
 their
vaccination
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 to keep them alive
at
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 least for few years. In conclusion, despite everyone's thoughts about modern
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, circuses
are still have
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 their place in
people
's hearts because of something that can not be seen
in
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 any
smartphones
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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