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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is generally believed by society that
money
 gives
people
 various opportunities, one of which is helping those in need. I completely agree that wealthy
people
 can provide financial support to populations who are facing certain monetary problems.
To begin
 with,
people
 with high incomes can help children and adults with serious health issues through charity organizations. There are thousands of
people
 in the world with severe diseases, which require incredibly expensive medical equipment.
Furthermore
, few
people
 can afford to buy medicine themselves
therefore
 a prosperous group of the population can donate their
money
 to charities which track
people
 in need and resend required sums of
money
 to the hospitals.
For instance
, as far as I know, Angelina Jolie is famous for sending a great portion of her earnings to charity organizations thereby saving lives.
In addition
,
due to
 mortal diseases or
accidents
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 many children lose their parents every day being left without a trustee.
As a result
, these youngsters find themselves in orphanages. From my point of view, they need financial support to get appropriate education to be able to find a job in the future and
to
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enter adulthood without much difficulty.
For example
, rich
people
 can create grand for children of school age who have lost parents or the only breadwinner of the family to motivate them to study hard.
To sum up
,
money
 is a key factor in providing assistance to
people
 who have encountered problems and cannot tackle them on their own.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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