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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the data for 5 types of jobs in the UK. The bar graph shows the salary of different professions,
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 the table represents the total hours of working by different job categories.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that underground drivers earned higher
while
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 working less as compared to any other profession.
Furthermore
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, no doubt that nurses worked a few times a week comparatively ,
,
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however
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 their earning has been observed relatively low, under 20,000 pounds with a minimum increase after 3
years
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 of experience. Drivers collected almost 50 thousand pounds on their joining and showed a small rise after working for 3
years
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. The salaries of police officers remained almost the same at 20,000 , even though their working hours are more than drivers and healthcare workers.
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, teachers and firefighters worked for longer periods and earn around 30,000 and 40,000 respectively in their early
years
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. These numbers got changed after 3
years
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 with only 10,000 added to their cheques.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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