The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

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The bar chart illustrates information about the price of one

nations

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exports

several

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of several

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items over 2 years. The table provides data

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proportion

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in each item of exports in 2016 compared to 2015.

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it is clear that

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petorleum

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petroleum

and engineered

goods

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have the highest value,

while

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argiculture

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agriculture

agricultural

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and

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have the lowest value.

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, all types of given

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showed increased

expact

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expect

the gems and

jewllery

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jewellery

over the given period. Regarding the

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the

textiles

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showed

highest

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the highest

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percentage

change

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in the values,

whereas

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the

argiculture

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agriculture

agricultural

goods

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was

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the lowest

change

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. Looking at the bar chart in more detail, the

petorleum

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petroleum

goods

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was

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the highest value compared to other products and in 2015

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around 60

billion

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$ and the next year showed raise to 62

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the

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textiles

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was

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the lowest in 2015 approximately 27 60

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$ and in 2016 was 31 62

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$. In terms of

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, the

higest

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highest

proportion

change

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was in

textiles

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at 15.24 %. The second

products

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product

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was gems and

jewllery

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jewellery

at 5.18%. In comparison , the lowest

change

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was in

petorleum

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petroleum

and agriculture

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at 3 and 0.81

percent

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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, textiles, change, billion with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

194 words

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