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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar chart illustrates information about the price of one
nations
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nation's
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 exports
several
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of several
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 items over 2 years. The table provides data
the
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on the
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 proportion
alter
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altered
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 in each item of exports in 2016 compared to 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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petorleum
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petroleum
 and engineered
goods
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 have the highest value,
while
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the
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apply
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argiculture
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agriculture
agricultural
goods
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 and
textiles
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 have the lowest value.
Furthermore
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, all types of given
goods
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 showed increased
expact
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expect
 the gems and
jewllery
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jewellery
 over the given period. Regarding the
table
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,table
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 the
textiles
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 showed
highest
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the highest
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 percentage
change
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 in the values,
whereas
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 the
argiculture
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agriculture
agricultural
goods
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was
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were
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 the lowest
change
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. Looking at the bar chart in more detail, the
petorleum
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petroleum
goods
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was
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were
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 the highest value compared to other products and in 2015
was
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were
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 around 60
billion
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 $ and the next year showed raise to 62
billion
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 $.
In contrast
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,
the
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textiles
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was
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were
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 the lowest in 2015 approximately 27 60
billion
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 $ and in 2016 was 31 62
billion
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 $. In terms of
table
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the table
a table
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, the
higest
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highest
 proportion
change
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 was in
textiles
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 at 15.24 %. The second
products
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product
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 was gems and
jewllery
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jewellery
 at 5.18%. In comparison , the lowest
change
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 was in
petorleum
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petroleum
 and agriculture
goods
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 at 3 and 0.81
percent
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per cent
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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, textiles, change, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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