The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the quantity of international male and female enrollments from Singapore, Malaysia, China, Sri Lanka and
France
who are studying one of the 2 types of computer science in Canadian
college
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. Some of them enrolled in the Networking
core
option and others in the
Database
core
option.
Overall
, we can notice that In most countries men tend to choose
Database
core
courses,
whereas
women mostly choose Networking
core
courses and women students number is higher The highest
male
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student's number is in Sri Lanka and China (8 000) and most of them participate in the
Database
core
course. Other countries like
France
, Malaysia and Singapore have lower than 5 000 enrolments. The highest number of female students is in China(9 000)and Malaysia with Singapore(7000).
Additionally
, the female student's amount is higher than males in those countries.
In contrast
to
this
, Sri Lanka and
France
have the lowest
women
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number of women
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enrollment's amount studying in
this
college with lower than 4000 people.
France
is the only country who had all female students enrolled on the
Database
Core
option in the college
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