The bar chart shows the number of overseas students enrolled in a third year Computer Science course at a Canadian college. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the quantity of international male and female enrollments from Singapore, Malaysia, China, Sri Lanka and

France

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who are studying one of the 2 types of computer science in Canadian

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. Some of them enrolled in the Networking

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option and others in the

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core

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option.

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, we can notice that In most countries men tend to choose

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core

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courses,

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women mostly choose Networking

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courses and women students number is higher The highest

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student's number is in Sri Lanka and China (8 000) and most of them participate in the

Database

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core

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course. Other countries like

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, Malaysia and Singapore have lower than 5 000 enrolments. The highest number of female students is in China(9 000)and Malaysia with Singapore(7000).

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, the female student's amount is higher than males in those countries.

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, Sri Lanka and

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have the lowest

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number of women

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enrollment's amount studying in

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college with lower than 4000 people.

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is the only country who had all female students enrolled on the

Database

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Core

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option in the college

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Single idea per paragraph

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