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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The maps give information about the current and after the development of the university sports centre.
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, the
two
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 most significant changes on the
map
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 are the leisure
pool
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 and Cafe. Looking first at the present graph, reception is located in the south and there are
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 entrances on the
right
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 and left
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 of the reception which are Called the Seating and changing room respectively. The changing room has a door to a 25m
pool
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 which is in the centre.
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, the gym is on the north
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 of the
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 and
also
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two
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 outdoor activities are situated on the
right
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 and left sides of the
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. Going forward to the future plan, reception, 25 m
pool
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 and seating will be located in the same place like the past.
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, the cafe a sports shop will be created on the
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 and left
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 of the entrance. A new changing room will be built on the left
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 of the
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 and has a way to a leisure
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 which will be made.
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, the gym will be resized and it will be sited in the same area as before. The
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 outdoor courts will be omitted and the
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 one will be replaced by a sports hall. On the east
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 of the
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,
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 dance studios will be established.
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