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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company. why might be this case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? give your reasons for answer Find essays with the same topic

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People nowadays prefer to have their own
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businesse
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businesse's
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business's
 rather than, to work for a
company
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. The aforementioned statement is showing the trend which is going common these days. I will shed light on both perspectives with the relative
example's
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.
Firstly
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, the main reason behind
this
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 trend is one's own structures, ways, and
management
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. In a
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company
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,company
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 you have to work under a CEO or the
management
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 of that organization. You are obliged to their rules and policies.
While
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on the other hand
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, in your personal
business
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 you are the owner of everything whether
,
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apply
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 it is
management
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 or strategies.
For example
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, if am working as
HR
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an HR
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 manager at CocaCola
company
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i
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I
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 have to do everything
according to
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 the strategies of
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the comapny
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comapny
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company
.
While
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on the other hand
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, if I own a beauty salon or am running a coffee bar
their
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there
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 will be my ownership. I can do whatever
i
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I
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 want.
Although
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, Working at
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company
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a company
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 is secure and self-employment
have
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has
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fear
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a fear
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 of
loss
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 factor at all stages. Because, if working at a
company
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 you just have to pay your time and talent and you do not have any concern about their
loss
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 or the
management
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.
Comparing
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Compared
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 to
this
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, having
own
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your own
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 business let you
to
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apply
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have
a
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the
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 joy of high profit
along with
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 high
loss
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also
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! Because
,
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apply
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 you are the owner you can't blame anyone if anything happened wrong or
due to
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 any type of
circumctances
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circumstances
circumstance
. You have to cover all the
loss
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by
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on
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 your own.
While
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, at
company
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loss
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,loss
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 you don't have to pay anything.
To sum up
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,
i
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I
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 would say working at any organization is safer than self-employment but, the profit margin is more
in
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of
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second
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a second
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 choice. Government should raise funding for
private
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the private
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sectors
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sector
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So that, people working under an organization can get paid from which they can manage their home and family expenses easily.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • entrepreneurial
  • independent contractor
  • freelancer
  • work-life balance
  • autonomy
  • economic independence
  • professional freedom
  • self-starter
  • innovator
  • financial instability
  • benefits
  • pension plans
  • healthcare coverage
  • unpredictable income
  • job security
  • networking
  • time management
  • burnout
  • sole proprietorship
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