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Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara or the antartic. Discuss advantage and disadvantage for tourist who visit these places.

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Tourism develops each year, and as a ,result more and more people choose vacation places which are located on different sides of the Earth. There are strict conditions for human beings,
such
 as deserts or the North Pole. In
this
 essay, I will argue
while
 tourists are getting new experiences, it can
also
 be dangerous for them. On the one hand, the deepest parts of our world do not contain familiar details of our everyday life which makes it more extraordinary and in ,turn provides interesting adventures for visitors.
As a result
, a new environment opens opportunities to discover a universe
that is
 not similar to ours at all.
For instance
, tourists can see white bears with their own eyes.
On the other hand
, a lack of facilities and strong weather conditions make
this
 type of journey much harder and expose people to dangers.
This
 can lead to either injury or even the death of the unprepared person. Taking everything into account it can be concluded that the demerits of visiting so distant regions outcome merits. The chance to try something unusual never overweights the chance to harm health.
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