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The government intends to ban smoking in public areas. Some people say that it is a good idea, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is an accentuated fact that smoking is injurious to health.
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, one section of society is in favour to boycott smoking openly in public areas
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 the other part is not impressed by governing body's intention towards prohibition on smoking.In
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 my perspective in ensuing paragraphs. Apparently, there are multifarious factors where a section of the public believes that authorities should impose a ban on smoking publicly and have myriad reasons to substantiate it. Is it true that passive smoking is more dangerous than active? Certainly yes. The most prominent factor is smoking in public influences young
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. Many young
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 are attracted towards smokers as they want to look cool as portrayed in Hollywood films.
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 who smokes looks attractive and
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 public to try.Another factor that underpins my notion is passive smoking is more dangerous than active smoking. A survey was conducted by BBC in 2018 throughout the world which gives shocking results about smoking. The lungs of
people
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 who lives with active smokers are exposed more and they are at higher risk of getting caught by diseases like lung cancer. Paradoxically, the first and foremost factor is the freedom to live. Every
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 in
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 world has the right to live freely and to do whatever he/she wants to do in public without disturbing others.
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 but not least addicted
people
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 cannot survive without smoking. There are numerous
people
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 in the world who are very addicted to smoking. They cannot live without smoking even for one second. If the ban on public smoking is imposed
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 it will become very hard for them to survive. Taking everything into consideration, I opine that government should ban open smoking as it has more demerits on the health of the country's
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. Smoking not only kills the
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 who smokes but
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 kills the
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 who is accompanying the smoker.
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