The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

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The chart and table illustrate

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use around the world and

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usage in two various nations

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Brazil

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and the Democratic of Congo.

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, it can be clearly seen that consumption of

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for agricultural purposes has risen tremendously

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domestic usage increased slightly in one decade (from 1900 to 2000).

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consumption per individual was much higher in

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than in African countries

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as the Democratic Republic of Congo.

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the first graph, it is interesting to note that world

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usage for industrial purposes was steady for domestic purposes between 1900 and 1940.

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, after 1940 they started to grow gradually until 2000.

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, the sector of agriculture slightly fluctuation from 1950 to 1970.

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, in the second table, we can notice that the population in

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(176 million) was far more than that in the Democratic Republic of Congo (5.2 million).

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, the irrigated area was much more in

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than in DRC.

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