The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
The chart and table illustrate
water
use around the world and
water
usage in two various nations
such
as
Brazil
and the Democratic of Congo.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that consumption of
water
for agricultural purposes has risen tremendously
while
domestic usage increased slightly in one decade (from 1900 to 2000).
Also
,
water
consumption per individual was much higher in
Brazil
than in African countries
such
as the Democratic Republic of Congo.
According to
the first graph, it is interesting to note that world
water
usage for industrial purposes was steady for domestic purposes between 1900 and 1940.
However
, after 1940 they started to grow gradually until 2000.
In addition
, the sector of agriculture slightly fluctuation from 1950 to 1970.
Moreover
, in the second table, we can notice that the population in
Brazil
(176 million) was far more than that in the Democratic Republic of Congo (5.2 million).
Therefore
, the irrigated area was much more in
Brazil
than in DRC.
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