The graph belew shows the numper of shops that closed and the number of new shops that people in one country btween 2011 and 2018

The graph belew shows the numper of shops that closed and the number of new shops that people in one country btween 2011 and 2018
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The given illustration presents information about the proportion of shop
closures
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and openings from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the number of
closures
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shops
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reached
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lowest point in 2015.
In contrast
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, the amounts of opening
shops
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reached the highest in 2011. First of all, the proportions of
closures
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fluctuated in the next four years,
while
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in 2015 it increased dramatically almost by 5500. After that, it grew steely in 2016. Eventually, the amounts of
closures
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remained unchanged in the
last
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three years, As far as the opening
shops
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are concerned, the percentage of opening started from 8500 stores in 2011
then
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it significantly decreased to 4000
shops
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in 2012, After that it recovered between 2012 and 2014, next the number of openings slightly declined from 2014 to 2015.
Moreover
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, the percentage of openings remained unchanged in the next three years.
Finally
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, it fell slowly in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words closures, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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