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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The two
maps
 illustrate how
public
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a public
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 park called Arnold Avenue changed when it first opened in 1920 and the same park in
present
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the present
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 time.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there
are
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apply
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have been
a
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apply
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new areas established including ,
children
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children's
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 play area,
café
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a café
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,
and
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an
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 Amphitheater for concerts, and
water
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a water
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 feature.
Furthermore
, some places have been unchanged namely, both
entrance
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entrances
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. Looking at the two
maps
 in more detail, the both entrance
in
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at
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top
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the top
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 and bottom of
maps
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the maps
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 have been unaltered and
also
th
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the
a
 rose garden in the top left of
maps
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the maps
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unchanged
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is unchanged
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. In the top right of the
maps
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,maps
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 the rose garden and pound
water
 plants have been replaced with
café
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a café
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 and
children
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children's
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 play area. In the bottom
corner
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,corner
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 right the glasshouse
have
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has
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 been
redevelopmented
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redevelopment
redevelopments
 to
water
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a water
the water
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 feature, and
also
the a
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the
a
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 new
entrnce
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entrance
have
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has
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 been
bulied
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built
 behind the
water
 feature. Regarding other changes, four sets and
rose
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a rose
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 garden
in
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at
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 the bottom have been relocated
in
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to
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 the
center
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centre
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 of the
maps
 in place of
fountain
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the fountain
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. In the middle left of the
maps
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,maps
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 the stage for musician have been made into Amphitheater for concerts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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