People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Not only most
people
are living longer these days but also
they have to work
longer at company
. I personally disagree with Add an article
the company
a company
this
topic. In the following essay, I will discuss the reason why I disagree with the given statement with examples.
First of all, people
who live longer deprive younger
Correct article usage
the younger
generation
’s work
opportunity
. Modern Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
people
tend to live longer because medical technology has been developing. This
mean is
that older Unnecessary verb
apply
people
can work
for a long time. However
, it is not good at
Change preposition
for
younger
Add an article
the younger
a younger
generation
. For example
, my friend wanted to work
so he apply
a certain company but he failed. Change the verb form
applies
This
is because a certain company which
he applied Change preposition
to which
have
many workers Correct subject-verb agreement
has
by
older Change preposition
apply
people
. As a result
, he was so depression and unhappy in this
situation.
Secondly
, A country’s economy result
Change the verb form
results
in
stopping actively. If a Change preposition
from
country
Change noun form
country's
economic
move actively, it would need to have many younger Replace the word
economy
generation
. Whereas
, if a country have
many older Change the verb form
has
people
, it would spend a lots
of money Correct the article-noun agreement
lot
in
health care. Change preposition
on
In addition
, a goverment
is not helpful for Correct your spelling
government
older
Correct article usage
the older
generation
working
longer. Change the verb form
to work
This
result can lead to get
a country’s doubt. Change the verb form
getting
For example
, my parents are working now as they pay to
health problems. Change preposition
for
Although
parents work
harder, they are too bad their
physical body. Through Change preposition
for their
this
, it does not mean to work
.
In conclusion, I demerit this
statement is that older people
should not remain in the workplace longer because young
Correct article usage
the young
generation
have
no chance to get a job and deter a country’s government growth.Change the verb form
has
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