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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is true that governments around the world spend more money on the objects of art,
such
 as theatres and kinds of music. Many people consider utilizing
this
 money on recreational activities costs a lot of money. Personally, I completely agree with
this
 view for a variety of reasons.
Firstly
, politicians can not enhance their developing country by investing in the object of art. It means that the government care for citizens' entertainment more than their developed policy by allowing their own citizens to enjoy music and theatrical performances.
This
 is because the
arts
 are necessary to educate the younger generation to appreciate culture and traditions. In fact, art investment is not necessary for developing countries because they have to care for conservatory taxes, exhibition capacities and heritages.
Moreover
, the authorities have less support financially as it predicts the quality of life that citizens will have.
However
, politics must be more inclined towards public
services
 like health and education which benefits the majority of the masses. It means they should have meticulously crafted plans which identify the economically weaker section and provide them with education and health
services
 at an affordable cost.
In addition
, the most significant duty of the laws is to address the everyday issues faced by the public.
For instance
, with the developing country and the development of high-tech devices, they must have policies for enhancing the citizen's
services
,
such
 as relief
services
 and business
services
 In conclusion, since there are growing tensions between the opponents and proponents of the
arts
' financing, many questions consider nowadays about the need to finance
arts
 on an official level are useless. In my opinion, the huge importance of the
arts
 is undeniable and public support for them is much needed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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