Many people believe that teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

For more than a
millenium
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millennium
, education has been given to
students
in a face-to-face
environemnt
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environment
. Because of the pandemic, there has been a transformation in the
way
of attending the
classes
via
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. And, there is a misconception that within 2050 the concept of physical classrooms will be replaced by virtual classrooms. We will discuss
further
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this
in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
,
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online schooling is not effective as visiting the school directly. There is always a problem faced by
students
or teachers during the
classes
, whether it is
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internet or audio or other technical issues, which always caused the
students
to miss their periods. As
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the actual
classes
have been held in a disciplined environment, the learners were punctual,
obedient
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and obedient
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and followed the
classes
without any
distraction
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distractions
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. But, in
case
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of e-learning, the
students
attend them from home which is not a school. They were skipping
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classes
, mostly distracted by the noises in their surroundings.
Secondly
, the bonding between the
staffs
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and the
students
were
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minimal in the online mode. Usually, in
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real
classes
, the teacher always engages the sessions in an interactive
way
by making some jokes and adding some fun
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along with
the daily lessons. As per studies, the above
way
of teaching always created an emotional
connect
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between the teachers and
students
, which not only made the learners
to
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relax from their stress
,
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but
also
improved the quality of education perceived by them.
This
way
of effective learning is completely lacking in the e-
classes
. Adding to the above, most of the online
classes
are conducted via smartphones that
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bluelight
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blue light
, which is harmful to the eyes in the long run. Learners
also
use
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headphones that
produces
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the
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sound waves directly in the ear drum, which will
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hearing problems when exposed for
long
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time.
Furthermore
,
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students
also
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addicted to online games in their learning age and
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the
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career. Concluding the above, though
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virtual
classes
are
convenient
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than
the
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hard
classes
, the quality and effectiveness it gives always
lags
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behind the real
classes
. Recent studies
also
shows
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that
,
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schools are transforming again back to the normal
classes
as the online
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are not suitable for our education system.
Hence
, by 2050 the chances of completely transforming to online
classes
are nill.
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