You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter Say how you feel about this performance Give details of your musical activities Explain how you would like him to help you with musical activities
Dear Charly Garcia,
I am writing to you regarding your
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First,
let me introduce myself, I am Pity Alvarez ex-singer of Intoxicados.
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, and it has brought me many good memories of when I was performing for Intoxicados. Use synonyms
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, the light's effects were impressive, I had never seen something like that.
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but not least, I would like to ask you if you have the chance to promote Linking Words
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I hope to hear back from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
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task achievement
Try to elaborate a bit more on the specific ways the singer's performance inspired you. This could make your admiration more vivid and heartfelt.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a single, clear idea. In your current structure, some ideas, like the mention of the light effects, seem slightly out of place with the rest of the paragraph's focus.
task achievement
Excellent use of a friendly and respectful tone appropriate for writing to a singer you admire.
coherence cohesion
Good use of logical structure, where you introduce yourself, appreciate the performance, provide personal updates, and make a request.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite