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Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects, while other believe that this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #school #students #study #news #subjects #waste #time
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 should study international
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 as one of their subjects. Studying abroad
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countries
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updated
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. If
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