Demand for gas and oil is increasing and so finding new sources in remote and untouched areas is a necessity. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It would indeed be a hard task to isolate a country which is unaffected by the phenomenon of demand for
oil
and
gas
.
People
would not find it shocking ,if,
this
trend were to heighten in the coming years ,considering the current trajectory of the modern world .Increasingly laid out for all to see and fast becoming a fixture of many discussions is an issue from all that pertains to the effects of
oil
and
gas
in remote and untouched areas .
This
essay shall analyse the issue from all sides and argue that
oil
and
gas
have more benefits ,whichever we look at.
Firstly
, I completely agree
with demanding
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that the demand
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for
oil
and
gas
is rising which is an indispensable material in
humans life
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.
People
improve their living standards
such
as developing countries, the running of cars and planes, and the production of goods as
consequence
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of higher living standards we need to keep finding new resources since we will eventually run out. Take Britain
people
for example
, where a poll published on the
BBC’S
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website stated that the overwhelming majority of present-day politicians had decided to find new sources from other untouched areas.
On the other hand
, finding new sources of
oil
and
gas
would cause many environmental problems in forests
as a result
, of water pollution, air pollution and wood pollution.
Subsequently
, plenty of animals lose their homes until eventually their death. In Germany in 2007 over a two-year period, which polled over ninety thousand
people
, showed that opinions varied considerably. A Vast majority supported the above-mentioned viewpoint and considered it as paramount.
To conclude
, finding new resources of
oil
and
gas
that we can sustain and improve our living standards .The negative impacts
of
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outweigh
this
will damage the environment
as well as
human health and the planet.
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task response
The essay needs to address the prompt more directly and provide a clear position on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Make sure to develop and support your ideas fully.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they lack clarity and coherence. Work on structuring your essay with clear topic sentences and transitions between paragraphs.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • fostering innovations
  • renewable energy sources
  • energy security
  • geopolitical tensions
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental risks
  • habitat destruction
  • irreversible damage
  • perpetuates dependence
  • transitioning
  • indigenous and local communities
  • ethical and social challenges
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