Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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There are several reasons for

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occurrence, first of them would be that smartphones are made to be engaging and addictive through all the apps that they

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acces

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access

to,

this

includes social media apps, video games ,

movie watching

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platforms etc.The number one priority of these programs is to keep

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attention as much as possible because

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relates proportionally

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profits made by the big companies and people fall for their strategies.

According to

the latest available data, the average person spends seven hours per day on screens connected to

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.Another major cause of

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circumstance is the volume of free

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that each person has.

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Americans today have more free

time

than earlier generations.Even though our work/school

time

doubled ,our home tasks

time

minimised

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this

resulted in more free

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overall

.On average, every person has 5 hours of

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leisure

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having what to do

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this

time

people use it for browsing the internet ,watching a movie etc. I personally think that more free

time

is better, and I am happy that we don’t have to spend as much

time

on household activities as we used to because the machines do it for

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now (the dishwasher, the washing machine and so on),

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these 5 hours of leisure

time

must be used for our development in a relaxing manner

such

as reading a book, painting ,

practicing

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sports and so forth.Misspending our resources is not o good thing. To sum it all up I strongly believe that managing

time

is essential and that

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will reflect our later

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Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

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