The two given pie charts illustrate the statistics of a study about the preference of boys and girls for leisure activities.

The two given pie charts illustrate the statistics of a study about the preference of boys and girls for leisure activities.
The two given pie charts illustrate the statistics of a study about the preference of boys and
girls
for leisure
activities
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the only similar figure was listening to music for boys and
girls
.
In addition
, boys preferred to play outdoor
activities
whereas
girls
chose to play indoor
activities
instead
. Turning to boy’s leisure
activities
, the percentage of playing computer games was the highest at 34%, slightly higher than the figure for playing basketball
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26% which left the proportion of reading far behind, at just 2%. Listening to music, skateboarding and soccer were less popular with 10%, 17% and 11% respectively. Moving to the girl’s graph, the percentage of dancing and reading took the leading position
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27%, followed by the preference
of
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reading
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21%. Interestingly, the number of computer games and netball was similar with 16% for the former and 15% for the latter.
Similarly
,
girls
allocated time for doing gymnastics and listening to music at around 10%.
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