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The pie chart compares the average household spending in two different countries in terms of five important categories in 2010.

The pie chart compares the average household spending in two different countries in terms of five important categories in 2010.
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The pie chart compares the average household spending in two different countries in terms of five important categories in 2010.
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it is clear that
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 householders in both countries spent a large proportion of their
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income

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on housing, food and other goods and services,
while
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 healthcare was the service with the lowest spending rate. In Malaysia, housing accounted for a third approximation, which was the biggest expenditure of household expenditures,
while
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 Japanese families allocated just 21% of their budget for that. Householders in Japan paid the highest proportion of other goods and services, representing 29% which was slightly more than
Malaysia
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in Malaysia

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. In terms of food, the figures for both countries were similar, at 24% for the former and 27% for the latter. Expenditure
of
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on

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 healthcare was the lowest category. In Japan,
this
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 represents 6% of the total,
while
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 households spent 20% on transport.These figures were exactly double that in Malaysia

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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