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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village lberaries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarize the information and make comparisons where relevant.
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 provided line graph illustrates the number of
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 loaned out from rural libraries over a period of four months, in 2014, and the pie chart explains the proportions of
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 borrowed in terms of genre.
Overall
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 it can be seen that the borrowing of
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 from the four libraries was quite varied, and the
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 of fiction were the most popular ones borrowed.
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, borrowed
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 from Ryeslip and Sutton Wood were quite high at the beginning compared to the others, at 300 and 250
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 per month in June, respectively for each one.
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, the borrowing process fell steadily at Ryeslip to stop, at about 175
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 in September, but Sutton Wood followed an erratic pattern, which was, at nearly 275 in July,
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; it dropped suddenly to 100
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 in August, and it dramatically rose again to 300
at the end
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 of the period. But West Easton and Church Mount had a similar pattern for borrowing
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 because the starting point was identical, at 50 in June, and
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 both of them clumped to stand, at 150
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 in September.
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 to that, fiction
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 represented the highest ratio of borrowing, at 43% in comparison to the others. But biography
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 were the next popular which borrowed, at around one-fifth.
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 the percentage of borrowing science and history was the same , 14%, self-help was the least popular one, at 10%.

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