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Band 4.5

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart illustrates the expenditure on exporting each sector’s goods in 2015 and 2016 and there is
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 available data on change between the two years. The figure of the chart is shown in billions of dollar units,
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 it is shown in percentages in the table.
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, petroleum products were the highest income of
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 country’s exports and textiles were the lowest ones in both years. The trend of exporting was mostly upward except for the gems and jewellery sector. Petroleum started with the highest income of all sectors which was roughly 61
billion
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dollars
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 and raised to 63
billion
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dollars
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 in the following year. It was about a 3% advance. It was followed by engineered goods which began at 58
billion
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dollars
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 and rose to 62
billion
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dollars
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.
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the agricultural products had a minimal increase in exporting, it was only a 0.81% difference. The most value change was seen in Textiles with a huge development of up to 15.24%, though it began with the lowest of 26
billion
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dollars
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.
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, the gems and jewellery sector was the only one with a decrease in value exported. It was opened at 43
billion
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dollars
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 and dropped to 41
billion
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dollars
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 in the next year, which was considered about a 5.18% reduction.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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