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The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.

The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.
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The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British
travelers
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 using car, bus and
train
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trains
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 to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.
Overall
, it is forecasted that more and more citizens in the UK choose
car
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cars
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 and
bus
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buses
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 as their
favored
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 vehicles, as opposed to the remaining public transport.
Additionally
, predictions express that the car is by far the most dominant throughout the surveyed time frame. Looking at the details, at the beginning of the period,
cars
 and buses ranked first and second in the
quantity
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 of commuters, at approximately 5
millions
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 for the former and 4
millions
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 for the latter. The 30-year-later period registered a gradual growth of roughly 2 and 1 million people using
cars
 and trains respectively.
By contrast
, the figure for buses stabilized in the first 10 years before decreasing minimally until 2000. From 2020 onwards, buses are expected to undergo a continual decrease of nearly 1 million in the number of users, making it the least commonly used type of transportation. Meanwhile, the number of
travelers
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travellers
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 commuting by
cars
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car
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 and
trains
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train
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 is forecasted to increase significantly after
leveling
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 out in 10 years. More specifically, in 2030,
whereas
 the majority of the British
is
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 foreseen to opt for
cars
 to travel every day, nearly 5 million commuters are predicted to commute by
trains
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train
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, which is nearly half of the figure for
cars
 in the same year
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