The graph on the rigth shows the amounts spent on clothes on the Internet in the USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003. Write a report for a university lecturere describing the information shown

The graph on the rigth shows the amounts spent on clothes on the Internet in the USA and Japan between 1999 and 2003. Write a report for a university lecturere describing the information shown
The graph reveals the online expenditure on clothes in millions of
dollars
in five years (1999-2003), comparing Japan and the USA. It can be clearly seen that both lines show great similarities.
Japanese
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Japan
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spent 10
million
dollars
in 1999, presenting a slice increase in 2000 (12
million
dollars
), and in the
follwoing
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following
year showing its lowest expenditure with 7
million
dollars
. After 2001, there exists a
rapide
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rapid
climb
of
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in
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money spent on apparel online (18
million
dollrs
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dollars
in 2002), with having
ist
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its
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peak in 2004 (20
million
dollars
). Starting from a lower point
with
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of
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5
million
dollars
, US
citizen
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citizens
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spent less money at the beginning
in
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of
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1999;
nevertheless
experiencing
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experienced
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a similar climb in the next year (10
million
dollar
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dollars
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). Not only is the curve dropping in 2001, but
also
it declines in the same way as the Japanese spending of money. Despise the starting point, there is no obvious outstanding difference between both countries and their rising online costs
on
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of
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clothes.
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