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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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In 2007, the
road
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 access was not relatively sufficient. It was quite hard to access the hospital
road
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 as the
parkings
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parking
were
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was
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 quite hectic. Buses and cars were parked at the side of the
road
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 at the same place. The parking lot seems small which can lead to parking congestion. People might be stuck for hours finding a parking spot if the hospital was busy. A lot of
traffic
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 might
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 happen since the
road
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 does not
fulfill
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fulfil
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 the
amount
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number
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 of cars and buses. Unlike in 2010, they have added
roundabouts
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. It is great to reduce
traffic
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congestions
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congestion
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 and it makes people follow more
traffic
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 rules.
Roundabouts
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 are generally used for maximizing the
traffic
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 flow, so people don’t get stuck at a place.
Roundabouts
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 are
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 generally safer for pedestrians walking from the City
Road
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.
Roundabouts
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also
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 reduce fuel
consumptions
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consumption
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 and emissions since vehicles must go slower to complete a circle. They
also
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 separate the parking spots for staff,
public
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the public
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 and buses. It helps prevent accidents and promote safety by reducing the number of vehicles on the
road
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 and reducing the likelihood of collisions.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, traffic, roundabouts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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