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The line graph compares the average number of British people using three different forms of transport over period of 60 year

The line graph compares the average number of British people using three different forms of transport over period of 60 year
The line graph compares the average
number
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 of British people using three different forms of transport over
period
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 of 60 year
It is clear that
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 the
number
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 of car
users
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have
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 increased dramatically over 60
year
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years
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of
bus
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users
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have
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has
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 decreased steadily and the
number
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 of train
users
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have
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has
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 slightly
rise
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risen
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 In 1970, the
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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 using cars and trains was about 2,5
million
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 and 5
million
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 and
have
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 increased steadily . At the same time , the
number
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 of
bus
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users
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 is just around 4
million
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. In 2015, the
number
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 of train
users
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 and
bus
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users
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 have been equaling around 3,6
million
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 In 2030, It is predicted that the
number
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 of car
users
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 and train
users
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 will increase to 9
million
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 and 5
million
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. At the same time, the
number
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 of
bus
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users
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 to travel is predicted to fall to 3
million
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, users, bus, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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