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. Some people think that it is better to choose friends who always have some options have them, Other people believe it’s good to have who disagree. discuses both views and give your options.

#people #friends #options #it’s #discuses
Nowadays with improved technology,
people
 not too difficult to have made friends in different counties with different cultures. Some folk like to live
with
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in
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 the same comfort zone friend. I would like to have
friend
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friends
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 with different cultures and
vision
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visions
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.
Firstly
,
who
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those who
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 is like to stay
same
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the same
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 options and don’t have any disagreement folk, There
are
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is
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long lasting
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long-lasting
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 very healthy
relationship
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relationships
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.Unable to develop unnecessary debit and fighting. They would take any task can get on time. Always time is
saving
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. Working together is very easy because of
same
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the same
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 option
people
. No
a
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apply
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arguments and unnecessary debates.
it
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 would be
as
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apply
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a strong bond.
On the other hand
,
People
 with different
ideology
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ideologies
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as a result
 buildup strong
team
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teams
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. When they want to make a decision be not in positions. Should be
long
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a long
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 time process. Beneficially
very
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and very
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 effective when
this
team
 get some options. Even
team
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the team
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 will be knowledgeable.
To conclude
 ,Point of in my view ,I strongly believe ones in a
while
people
 who disagree with us
able
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are able
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 to get
a good solutions
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a good solution
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. What is without light
darkness
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and darkness
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likewise
 what is the relationships without
fight
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fighting
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.
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way
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,way
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 we are staying 21centuray.
sosity
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 has
a
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various ideas. So because of that going to take some
decision
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decisions
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 too late.
As a
result
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,result
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finally
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,finally
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 come out
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with positives
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positives
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positive
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 output
. .
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.
...
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Eventually
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,Eventually
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 any positions most of
the
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our
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 friend disagrees
actually
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with actually
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 save us and correct us.
However
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,However
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 who
has
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have
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a
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the
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team
 same mildest
they
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apply
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are not
strong
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a strong
the strong
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team
 and knowledgeable
team
.
Furthermore
 all of them same mildest unavailable to chance for the talk over.
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