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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same product anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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 most countries are becoming similar to each other because of that
people
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 can buy the same commodity anywhere they want. In my
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this
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 development has some negative effects. As all
people
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 know, one of the most important parts of any country is its cultural background. With
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 some parts of cultures may omit.
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, in some parts of
Iran
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people
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 wear their traditional clothes which are part of their culture, and with the import of brand-new products like Nike, and Adidas
people
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 prefer to wear those clothes. So with time, many
people
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 never wear their traditional clothes because they want to live like Western life. The tourism industry is another part that may have been affected by globalization. Many
people
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 pay a visit to another place to experience something unique to that culture.
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Iran
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 has lots of traditional cuisine with a rich historical background. In the past most
people
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 had to come to
Iran
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 to taste those foods ,
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however
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 nowadays
people
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 do not need to come to
Iran
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 because those cuisines are cooked in their country. Thereby, the number of visitors fell sharply. In conclusion, nowadays most countries are becoming similar and individuals have the option to buy a product anywhere they want. In my point of view,
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 development has some negative effects
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 as loss of cultural diversity, and it harms the tourism sector.
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