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Companies and individuals, and not governments should pay the bill of pollution. Do you agree or disagree?

#companies #individuals #governments #bill #pollution
Pollution is one of the major
crisis
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 that the world is facing currently. Most of
this
 pollution is the result of sharply increasing numbers of industries and fuel consumption by various vehicles. Unfortunately,
instead
 of the government,
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local population is more responsible for all
this
 mess yet people are not ready to contribute towards
this
 great cause . In my opinion,the government should impose heavier taxes on
such
 industries and vehicles owner , so that, they
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 on alternative solutions for energy and we can spend taxpayer's money on health, education and basic necessities .
Firstly
, if owners of
such
 businesses will be paying more money as taxes in response to giving unhealthy gases and waste to the earth, they will think about using better fuel sources to save their money. They may try to switch to solar energy and various other resources to avoid
such
 filth.
For instance
, a single village in England with 16 families only, installed
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 for their region to keep their surroundings clean and healthy. In
this
 way, they will give
a
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better thought to
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 and take steps for
future
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.
Secondly
, saving government funds will help to protect
basic
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 rights of
population
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. Legislators will be able to spend that on new schools , universities and hospitals . Apart from that, the inflation caused by COVID-19 has literally put a lot of debt on
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 so relieving that liability will help the cause . In conclusion, if the bills of pollution will be paid by companies and individuals causing it , it will help in both ways.
This
 will be a better path for future development and utilisation of eco-friendly fuel
as well as
 it will save a lot of earnings for better projects.
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