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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by International fast food. Many people think that it is good to eat traditional foods while other believe that fast food is a good choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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These days, the consumption of fast
food
 has increased and
replaced
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 by home-cooked
food
. But what is the most effective method for dealing with the raised concerns about its negative impact
.
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 Some people believe that
this
 trend will affect families and societies in many aspects. I completely agree, and in
this
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Firstly
, The consumption of junk foods often leads to a decline in
overall
 health as its typically high in calories ,unhealthy, and contributes to many diseases.
For example
, obesity, cardiovascular, and so. If people continue to eat
this
 unhealthy
food
then
 they would be afflicted with
the
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dreadful diseases. Another reason why I agree that
this
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have
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 a wide-ranging impact on our communities. Take teenagers as an example. Teenagers these days are less productive than in the past by 30% as mentioned in one of the experiments done by Oxford University, and the major reason for
this
 is the shift towards fast foods leading to the erosion of these healthier habits, negatively impacting the
individuals
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 productivity and cognitive thinking.I strongly believe that
this
 is a serious way of wasting money. What is more, it frequently leads to overspending. In conclusion, it is a common misconception that eating international
food
 saves people time and effort when preparing home-cooked meals. I believe that overconsumption will have several adverse effects
for
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 our communities,
such
 as unhealthy habits, dangerous illness, and waste of money. Personally, I believe we should give
this
 idea some thought before making a decision.
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