In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some countries believe that
to own
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a
home
is an asset. In my opinion,
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agree with the notion because, when you own your
home
you automatically do not have to be making a monthly payment for a shelter. You can
rather
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save that fund or divert the money for that payment for other necessities of life,
such
as a good education for yourself or a family. Moreso, houses can equally be a source of income when you rent
it
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out, in parts or in
its
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entirety, for others to live in. You can
also
use it as
a
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collateral to acquire more assets eg
buisness
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business
capital, machinery, lands, other houses etc from banks.
Also
,
house
prices can only appreciate and never
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.
This
means that whenever you decide to sell the
house
, you will only make gains on the capital used in buying your
house
. That
not withstanding
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, you can pass down a
house
as an inheritance and it will continue to be an abode to your generations. Acquiring a
house
is a good
buisness
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business
idea as it can become easier to acquire other houses, once you have your first one,and put it up for rental.
However
, a
house
acquisition in some countries can give an immigrant automatic citizenship in that country. Generally, being a
house
owner automatically gives you peace of mind and contributes to
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mental stability.
This
is because you no longer bother about shelter,
being
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a necessity of life.
House
ownership is a serious contributor to financial stability in most ways, and has always been a serious concern even in societies where renting seems cheaper than buying , even though
ones
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financial recklessness can easily lead to loosing of a
home
. There are so many adjustments one can
do
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in
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an acquired property, to
suite
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ones
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lifestyle which is not obtainable in
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case of
a
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rented
accomodation
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accommodation
. There could be reasons why one may not want to own a
home
, but generally speaking, property ownership has always been considered a great idea, and its acquisition can not be overrated.
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