The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overweigh people in society? How can this problem be solved?

Most
of
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people
are suffering from
overweight
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, which can
result
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health problems.
This
is mainly because of
consumption
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the consumption
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more
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of more
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calories
than burning through physical activities and fast
food
autlets
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outlets
are becoming ubiquitous. There are
number
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of solutions which should be implemented to deal with overweight.
Firstly
, the main reason is the effect of fast
food'
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food
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meals which contain a lot of
carbohydrate
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and fat.
While
if they eaten in quantity can
result
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people
obisity
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obesity
.
On
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the
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other word, fast
food
are
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every where
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and even more than healthy restaurants, which serve fresh fruit and vegetables. And it is important to consume different
food
groups to have a healthy diet.
Secondly
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people
are
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lack of out working,
that
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means they do not do physical activity, which
lead
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to
increase
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the
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average of
calories
in the body.
As a result
, many
people
do not have a
regularly
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program for sport or any healthy diet program,
this
lead to promote overeating which cause the overweight. There are two effective
solution
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to the problem of overeating which is avoiding
fasd
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fast
food
by following a healthy diet,
this
will
effect
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fast
food
and take them to provide
a healthy alternatives
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a healthy alternative
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.
Furthermore
, meals will be contained more protein, fresh vegetables and fruits. So fat, salt and sugar will be reduced by
the
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fast
food
. Another method, of dealing with
consumption
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calories
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of calories
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is doing
exercise
. To illustrate, doing
exercise
is essential for maintaining a healthy body and burning
calories
. When
people
eat
calories
and do tiring
exercise
which is useful to burn
mor
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more
fat. So
healt
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health
will not be influenced by
calories
or resulted overweight. In conclusion, offering healthy alternatives and
also
taking up more
exercise
are effective for
this
issue. If
people
worked out really hard, overweight would Doon decrease.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overweight
  • serious health problems
  • unhealthy food
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • physical activity
  • psychological factors
  • stress
  • emotional eating
  • body image
  • eating habits
  • cultural norms
  • portion sizes
  • awareness
  • education
  • nutrition
  • healthy eating
  • dietary choices
  • promoting
  • fruits
  • vegetables
  • whole grains
  • physical activity
  • recreational facilities
  • balanced diets
  • implementing policies
  • food advertising
  • marketing
  • healthcare professionals
  • weight management
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