The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overweigh people in society? How can this problem be solved?
Most
of
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apply
people
are suffering from Use synonyms
overweight
, which can Add a missing verb
being overweight
result
health problems. Add the preposition
inresult
fromresult
This
is mainly because of Linking Words
consumption
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the consumption
more
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of more
calories
than burning through physical activities and fast Use synonyms
food
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autlets
are becoming ubiquitous. There are Correct your spelling
outlets
number
of solutions which should be implemented to deal with overweight.
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a number
the number
Firstly
, the main reason is the effect of fast Linking Words
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food'
meals which contain a lot of Correct your spelling
food
carbohydrate
and fat. Fix the agreement mistake
carbohydrates
While
if they eaten in quantity can Linking Words
result
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inresult
fromresult
people
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obisity
. Correct your spelling
obesity
On
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In
the
other word, fast Correct article usage
apply
food
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are
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is
every where
and even more than healthy restaurants, which serve fresh fruit and vegetables. And it is important to consume different Correct your spelling
everywhere
food
groups to have a healthy diet. Use synonyms
Linking Words
Secondly
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,Secondly
people
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are
lack of out working, Unnecessary verb
apply
that
means they do not do physical activity, which Correct pronoun usage
which
lead
to Change the verb form
leads
increase
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an increase
the
average of Change preposition
in the
calories
in the body. Use synonyms
As a result
, many Linking Words
people
do not have a Use synonyms
regularly
program for sport or any healthy diet program, Change the adverb
regular
this
lead to promote overeating which cause the overweight.
There are two effective Linking Words
solution
to the problem of overeating which is avoiding Change to a plural noun
solutions
fasd
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fast
food
by following a healthy diet, Use synonyms
this
will Linking Words
effect
fast Correct your spelling
affect
food
and take them to provide Use synonyms
a healthy alternatives
. Correct the article-noun agreement
a healthy alternative
healthy alternatives
Furthermore
, meals will be contained more protein, fresh vegetables and fruits. So fat, salt and sugar will be reduced by Linking Words
the
fast Correct article usage
apply
food
. Another method, of dealing with Use synonyms
consumption
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the consumption
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calories
is doing Change preposition
of calories
exercise
. To illustrate, doing Use synonyms
exercise
is essential for maintaining a healthy body and burning Use synonyms
calories
. When Use synonyms
people
eat Use synonyms
calories
and do tiring Use synonyms
exercise
which is useful to burn Use synonyms
mor
fat. So Correct your spelling
more
healt
will not be influenced by Correct your spelling
health
calories
or resulted overweight.
In conclusion, offering healthy alternatives and Use synonyms
also
taking up more Linking Words
exercise
are effective for Use synonyms
this
issue. If Linking Words
people
worked out really hard, overweight would Doon decrease.Use synonyms
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