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The diagram illustrates the process by which bricks are manufacturated for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process by which bricks are manufacturated for the building industry.
The diagram illustrates the process by which bricks are
manufacturated
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manufactured
 for the building industry.
Overall
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, there is brick manufacturing that consists
7
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of 7
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steps.
In the
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The
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 given diagram clearly shows each process
ensure
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to ensure
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fully
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full
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 control of manufacturing.
Firstly
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,
digger
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the digger
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 digs clay
by
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into
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dipper
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a dipper
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 and put
out
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it out
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 on the metal grid,
that
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which
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 drains large chunks of clay.
Then
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 they
gets
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get
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 on the roller,
after
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this
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, there is a mixing of sand with water to
subsequent
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subsequently
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adding
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add
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 into clay. Later, makes
shape
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a shape
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 and
pass
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passes
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 by
wire
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a wire
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 cutter.
Although
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, there are alternative
variation
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variations
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 using mould that
not
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are not
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 inferior in any way.
Following
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this
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, gets in
drying
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the drying
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 oven
by
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for
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 24-48 hours and moves into
kiln
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the kiln
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 there is
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a warm
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warm up
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warm-up
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 to moderate
tempature
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temperature
(200-980
celcium
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calcium
) before the brick
color
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colour
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 change,
then
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icreases
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increases
increase
 to high
tempature
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temperature
temperatures
.
Further
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,
eventually
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 carry into
cooling
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the cooling
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 chamber and leave for 48-72 hours.
Then
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, put out the ready-made bricks for transportation, lie packaging on top of each other and
delivers
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deliver
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 to
building
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the building
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 business.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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