The two pie charts illustrate percantage of some employment patterns by sex and occupation in Great Britain in 1992.
The two pie charts illustrate
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the percantage
percantage
of some employment patterns by sex and occupation in Great Britain in 1992.
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percentage
Overall
, it can be seen that more males
worked by
manual Change preposition
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jobs
. Whereas
, non-manual jobs
appealed for
females.
In regard to manual Change preposition
to
jobs
, more males
than females were
worked 52 per Unnecessary verb
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cent
and 31 per cent
respectively. According to
other manual jobs
, the indicator between male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
can Fix the agreement mistake
females
seen
to be equal, Change the verb form
be seen
aro9und
27 per Correct your spelling
around
cent
to 26 per cent
. In any case, the demand for the
general labourers is low, than Correct article usage
apply
other
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for other
works
.
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workers
On the other hand
, non manual
occupations were more popular among women at 69 per Add a hyphen
non-manual
cent
in contrast
to 48 per cent
among males
. However
, more males
were positioned managerial and professional works
than women, 36 per Replace the word
workers
cent
and 29 per cent
respectively. The proportion of females in clerical or related works exceeded that of male
, at 31 per Fix the agreement mistake
males
cent
and 6 percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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