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The illustrated pie charts exhibit the cycle of in which way current toxic waste tranform to polluted rain which make filthy the surrounding and meal sources.

#exhibit #cycle #waste #tranform #rain #sources
The illustrated photos exhibit the cycle
of
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in which way current toxic waste
tranform
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transform
 to polluted rain which make filthy the surrounding and meal sources.
Overall
, it can be clearly
catched
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caught
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 that toxic rain begins from daily action and industrial wastes
as well as
 finishing with destroying human’s contributing. As the cycle suggests, there
four
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are four
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 ways to initiate fog(housing,
tranport
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transport
, factories,
power
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and power
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 stations).
Those
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 contaminated air from those locations
reach
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 clouds.
For instance
,
carbom
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carbon
 and sulphur dioxides,nitrogen oxides and mercury and i.e. . Polluted clouds are made by mixed waste and
cloud
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clouds
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. Contaminated clouds share
to
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 other continents and nations. They do not have
limit
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at
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on
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 navigation. Cardon dioxide falls down with rain to the Earth , damaging fields and hills
as well as
plant
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plants
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.From
those high location
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that high location
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 that dirty water navigates to watery places
as
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such as
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 rivers ,
lakes
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and lakes
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 which are detected at the down of hills.With the water
that is
 not tidy pour plant and food source which society have as necessary meal.
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