The table below gives information on the gender, marital status and age of employees working in retail and manufacturing industries of a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts that employees in the retail and manufacturing
industry
are divided by gender, marital status and age
.
It can be seen that overall
, in the manufacturing industry
the percentage of males 65% is the highest. Add a comma
,industry
Whereas
the highest percentage of 53% is female in retail. On the other hand
, marital status in the manufacturing industry
of married people gradually increased to 69% and retail in
61%. Change preposition
to
Moreover
, talk about single status employees were 31% and 39% respectively in both industries.
In addition
, the average age
of 44 in the manufacturing industry
whereas
40 average age
in the retail industry
.Furthermore
the age
bracket of 62+ in retail 4+ but it was doubled in the manufacturing industry
with 8%.Eventually
the Add a comma
,Eventually
age
bracket of 28-39 age
employees fell to 32% and raisin to 36% in the retail industry
at the same time 40-24 age
people also
combined.Submitted by ksr.sandya on
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