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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
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People
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 have a myriad of views on whether
people
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 should
work
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 as
freelancers
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 or full-time workers in their careers.
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 the flexibility of the working schedule and earnings, there is an increasing trend of self-employment in society.
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, we should not overlook the drawbacks of being self-employed, which lead to unstable working environments and difficulties in managing individual financial issues. Of the reasons why individuals are eager to find part-time jobs, the most significant reason is that they can enjoy the freedom of arranging their working schedule, including the decisions on their jobs’ natures and workplaces. ‘ Slash’ is the prime example to show how flexibility can be executed in their
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 life. Not signing a regular contract with their employers, slashers apply for a variety type of jobs and arrange their holidays and working time, and even refuse the
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 which they are forced to do. Another reason for the rapid increase in self-employment is that they can enjoy flexible
income
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 earnings. The earnings of
freelancers
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 depend on how many jobs they have accomplished, which is the same as the principle of ‘the more you
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, the more you get’.
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, craftsmen's
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 is derived from their handmade crafts. The more products they made, the more
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 they earn. In
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 way,
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free
 can gain autonomy to get a
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-life balanced lifestyle. Despite the above reasons for attracting
people
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 to become works as
freelancers
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, we should not overlook the disadvantages of being self-employed.
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,
freelancers
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 usually face unstable working environments, which means that their incomes have fluctuated. Since
freelancers
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 usually deal with employers verbally rather than signing agreements, there are common delayed payments.
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 is in turn
freelancers
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 are not gain much protective compare to those full-time workers. Another noticeable drawback is that
people
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 who are
freelancers
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 are facing difficulties in managing their own individual financial issues,
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 as applying for mortgages and credit cards. The banks mostly require their applicants to show employment records to prove their stable financial conditions,
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freelancers
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 find it hard to show those records.
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, it is difficult for them to apply for mortgages to buy properties or even credit cards, and they lose autonomy in their financial planning eventually. Under
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 line of thinking,
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 the flexibility, being self-employed is easier to enjoy a
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-life balanced living environment.
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, it may lead to unstable in working plans and
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 and
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 leads to difficulties in the application of mortgages or related issues, which diminish your freedoms in those aspects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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