The table below shows the percentages of moblie phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.

The table below shows the percentages of moblie phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.
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shows comparative data about using various cell phone features by its owners between 2006 and 2010.
Overall
, it is obvious that the most popular function among
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users during the period
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2006 and 2010 has been making calls. As is presented in the table there was no capability for searching the Internet and recording videos by 2006,
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next 4 years these features
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been gaining popularity in society.
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, the huge changes were in the field of playing games, within a time span of four years percentage rate has grown
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24%.
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functions
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as taking photos, playing music and texting messages
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rised
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almost 10%. As aforementioned, making calls is the most required operation and the one which nearly has no alterations in percentage rate.
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