The table below shows the percentages of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.

The table below shows the percentages of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features from 2006 to 2010.
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The given table highlights information about how many cell phone owners
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seven diverse mobile-related features from 2006 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that apart from making calls which saw a small decrease; other categories' percentages increased over the period in question. Another striking point is that Search the internet and
also
Record video had not any kind of information in 2006. Looking at the details, the percentage of making calls was similar in the two mentioned years with the exception of 2010 which saw a per cent decrease.
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, Take Photos were ranked second with portions from 66% to 76%. Followingly, the Message category's ratio went up and hit a peak of 79 in 2010. Surprisingly, the portion of playing games was threefold and enhanced from 17% to 41%. Not only that Searching the internet
also
rose from 41% to 73%. Playing music was
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12% to 26%.
finally
, Recording video percentages rocketed from 9% to 35%.
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