some people beleive that it is important to keep the home and the work place tidy and organized. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view.

I strongly agree
with
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it is important to keep the home and workplace
place
organized and tidy because it has lots of benefits. My viewpoint is disuse blow.
Firstly
, there are so many advantages of organising a
place
such
as if a
person
wants to find a thing
then
he or she can easily get that.
For example
, if a
person
wants a file from her office desk and it is not organized
then
it will be difficult to find that. If
things
would
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not clear and if someone comes to a
place
that would not look good. People should
also
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also
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as well as
use the better options to keep organised.
Secondly
, the well-organized
place
will give a good vibe
also
.
For example
, if a lady in the house wants a newspaper and if his house is neat and clear
then
it would be easy for her to search for that thing
things
.
Things
should be kept in their own
place
. Keeping
things
properly is a good habit. If a
person
will
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things
properly,
which
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will help them to remember where and at what
place
it is put. Even, by organising
things
exercises will be
also
done which is even good for a body. In conclusion, people should keep their
place
neat and proper so that it would be helpful for them to manage their work properly. From my viewpoint and my opinion is that a
person
should keep the
place
clean. Keeping
things
proper
have
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more benefits.
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