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Topic: More and more people think there is no need for printed paper newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#topic #people #paper #newspapers
Increasing
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 population of the masses doubt the need to print
paper
newspaper
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newspapers
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. Only a few
number of
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people
 still see the need for printed
paper
newspapers
. In my opinion,
i
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 agree with the larger community of
people
 who see no reason for printing a
newspaper
. Analysis of cheaper use of
the
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cyber space
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cyberspace
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 for
information
 and the ease to recall any
information
 needed
in
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 the
internet
 will evidence the reasons why printed
paper
newspapers
is
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 gradually
loosing
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its
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their
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 importance in the dissemination of
information
 in
the
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society.
Firstly
, the
cyber space
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 is consistently providing even much more amount of
information
 to
people
, through their phones and other electronic gadgets at a cheaper rate and with little or no cost and stress of production
rigors
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 encountered during
paper
newspaper
 production.
For instance
,
people
 use the same phone meant for communication to access any
information
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from
 the
internet
, just with a click of a button.
This
 is
a
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proof that printing
newspapers
 now is a complete waste of ink, papers and other resources used during
this
 production.
Hence
 the doubt in
peoples
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people's
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mind
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minds
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, as to the need to print
paper
newspers
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newspapers
.
Secondly
, it is easier to recall any
information
 one needs via the
internet
, than flipping through the pages of
newspapers
.
For example
, to search for
information
 from a
newspaper
, one needs so many
nuights
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nights
 and days to go through
heeps
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 of
newspapers
, probably hipped in a room, over the years, constituting
nuisance
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 and taking up needed space.
whereas
, you could click on your gadget and every
information
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piece of information
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 you need will pop up in seconds without stress.
this
 no doubt made the wider population of
people
 start seeing printed
paper
newspaers
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newspapers
 as pointless.
Therefore
, the reason to stop seeing
paper
newspapers
 as the best source of
information
. In conclusion,
i
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 agree with the rising number of the population who do not see the need
in
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paper
newspaper
 printing. These increasing masses have doubts as to the need to print
paper
newspapers
 when they could still get even more
information
 from the
internet
 and at no cost. I am thereby predicting the total extinction of
paper
newspaper
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 in the nearest future.
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